Well done Sherry, this has great potential to be a really good story. Remember you punctuation. Is this magic box going to be used for good? What adventures awaits Niomy on her quest to find this magic box? I look forward to reading this story when you have written more or have finished. Keep up the good work.
I agree Mrs Naylor. Sherry i really like the imagination. I would of never thought of those names really good. Why have you chose those characters? I know we did not have lots of time to do this but really this sentence is not finished look:Then Niomy realized. Realized what?
Well done Sherry, this has great potential to be a really good story. Remember you punctuation. Is this magic box going to be used for good? What adventures awaits Niomy on her quest to find this magic box? I look forward to reading this story when you have written more or have finished. Keep up the good work.
I agree Mrs Naylor. Sherry i really like the imagination. I would of never thought of those names really good. Why have you chose those characters? I know we did not have lots of time to do this but really this sentence is not finished look:Then Niomy realized. Realized what?
Why did you do this story and did not do another one.