Adam I like the way you described like shifting side to side. Why have you not done it in paragraphs? Maybe use some more adverbs.
Lovely description Adam, I liked that you used some of your senses. Maybe you could have used all of your senses in your description, for example what could you feel, taste or smell.
Well done Adam, you have some really good description going on. Next time try using some similes, to make your work even better.
Fantastic Adam,I love how you used the dragon pictures,why don’t you use some paragraphs??
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Adam I like the way you described like shifting side to side.
Why have you not done it in paragraphs?
Maybe use some more adverbs.
Lovely description Adam, I liked that you used some of your senses. Maybe you could have used all of your senses in your description, for example what could you feel, taste or smell.
Well done Adam, you have some really good description going on. Next time try using some similes, to make your work even better.
Fantastic Adam,I love how you used the dragon pictures,why don’t you use some paragraphs??