I love all the similes you have used, they really bring your diary alive!
I don’t think you mean ‘exclaim’ in the first sentence though…
Can you read and make sure your tenses are the same, don’t mix past and present. E.g. I felt terrified, not I feel terrified.
I love all the similes you have used, they really bring your diary alive!
I don’t think you mean ‘exclaim’ in the first sentence though…
Can you read and make sure your tenses are the same, don’t mix past and present. E.g. I felt terrified, not I feel terrified.