World war 1

Posted on April 28, 2017 by Deleted User
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2 Responses to World war 1

  1. Wasma says:
    April 30, 2017 at 4:28 pm

    Wow that is really good captin

  2. RemarkableRelaxingRuwaida says:
    May 2, 2017 at 1:07 pm

    Wow that’s really good .
    Positve:Your similes are really good.Especially this one ‘Black rats with huge ears like cheeters running for it’s prey’
    Question:Could you try to add personification in your writing?
    Suggestion:I suggest that you can use adverbs?

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