Archie, I like your persuasive writing to encourage others to join Benedict. You use good vocabulary choices that make the reader keen to visit and join our amazing school. Your writing makes you sound very proud, a great feeling to give to your reader.
Perhaps a next step would be to include how Benedict has enriched your life or check some spellings and punctuation.
Thank you for posting your writing.
From
Mrs Smith
Archie, I like your persuasive writing to encourage others to join Benedict. You use good vocabulary choices that make the reader keen to visit and join our amazing school. Your writing makes you sound very proud, a great feeling to give to your reader.
Perhaps a next step would be to include how Benedict has enriched your life or check some spellings and punctuation.
Thank you for posting your writing.
From
Mrs Smith
Same