Excellent story opening! Good use of similes to describe. You add lots of extra detail so I can really imagine what it would be like to be there. You have also used a subordinate clause to move the action forward – well done!
What other sentence starters could you use for effect?
Excellent story opening! Good use of similes to describe. You add lots of extra detail so I can really imagine what it would be like to be there. You have also used a subordinate clause to move the action forward – well done!
What other sentence starters could you use for effect?