Joe, i like the way you used your adverbs.why did you put a picture of a moon and trees? try to add more detail.
I like the similies like mountains are as tall as London eye.Can you not add to much similies?Next time search the dictionary for spellings.
Be careful Joe… your sentence openers are very repetitive. Why not try an adverbial opener such as ‘in the distance’ instead of always opening with the noun? I do like your use of simile though, particularly the comparison to a Viking blade.
Thank you guys
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Joe, i like the way you used your adverbs.why did you put a picture of a moon and trees? try to add more detail.
I like the similies like mountains are as tall as London eye.Can you not add to much similies?Next time search the dictionary for spellings.
Be careful Joe… your sentence openers are very repetitive. Why not try an adverbial opener such as ‘in the distance’ instead of always opening with the noun? I do like your use of simile though, particularly the comparison to a Viking blade.
Thank you guys