Positive: wow I like your description, particularly the bit where you said people froze to death.
Question:Can you put it in paragraphs?
Suggestion:Can you add any more description on your snowy setting?
I really liked when you said people froze to death it was really powerful.also you do not have much spelling mistakes so that was very good.Next time maybe make the paragraphs bigger they were more like sentences.Why did you describe the icicles like you did.
I love the imagery of those poor people freezing to death, chopping wood. How tragic! How do your dragons resemble birds? Maybe next time you could write s few more sentences in each paragraph.
Positive: wow I like your description, particularly the bit where you said people froze to death.
Question:Can you put it in paragraphs?
Suggestion:Can you add any more description on your snowy setting?
Okay Ruwaida I will definitely use
More paragraphs and I will definitely put
in more description
I really liked when you said people froze to death it was really powerful.also you do not have much spelling mistakes so that was very good.Next time maybe make the paragraphs bigger they were more like sentences.Why did you describe the icicles like you did.
Positive: I like When you said people froze to death while, they chop fire wood but i dont get it
very nice william
Why didn’t you use the power of three
From William
I love the imagery of those poor people freezing to death, chopping wood. How tragic! How do your dragons resemble birds? Maybe next time you could write s few more sentences in each paragraph.