I love the way you described your creature you really used your imagination and i also love your adjectives. Why did you chuse to describe your mythical beast like you did?. I do think you should make it alll black and you also need some more capitals but other than that i realy loved your story
Wow Mitchell, you have used some fantastic descriptive language that makes your writing stand out, well done. I would like to see some more connectives in your writing please, to make it flow better.
Why are these children being sent to be eaten? What is your hero going to do about it? How can you make you work even better? Keep up the good work!
I love the way you described your creature you really used your imagination and i also love your adjectives. Why did you chuse to describe your mythical beast like you did?. I do think you should make it alll black and you also need some more capitals but other than that i realy loved your story
Nice work doing the describing part of the monster.Why did you a personifacition?
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I love the way you described your creature
Wow Mitchell, you have used some fantastic descriptive language that makes your writing stand out, well done. I would like to see some more connectives in your writing please, to make it flow better.
Why are these children being sent to be eaten? What is your hero going to do about it? How can you make you work even better? Keep up the good work!