You clearly have a great grasp of adjectives and this is very descriptive. You’ve also used your senses to hello add detail. However, I reckon you can do a lot better so I’m going to give you some pointers and then I would like you to reblog this.
First of all, this becomes quite repetitive because of the over use of short sentences. I’ve been asking you to add conjunctions for a while and I think this will be much better if you link sentences together.
Secondly, check that your sentences make sense; freezens isn’t a word, what does a tree ‘swifting ‘ mean?
You clearly have a great grasp of adjectives and this is very descriptive. You’ve also used your senses to hello add detail. However, I reckon you can do a lot better so I’m going to give you some pointers and then I would like you to reblog this.
First of all, this becomes quite repetitive because of the over use of short sentences. I’ve been asking you to add conjunctions for a while and I think this will be much better if you link sentences together.
Secondly, check that your sentences make sense; freezens isn’t a word, what does a tree ‘swifting ‘ mean?
This is tiago you r comment is very good and there’s adverbs,punctuation,verbs.
This is Tiago your comment is very good and there’s adverbs,punctuation,verbs.
Hishanth I like your first person like I can see iceicels like daggers .next time add more adverbs like houly and daily