It’s great that you’ve tried to use personification, simile and some really appropriate adjectives. Next time, vary your sentence openers. A lot of these are repetitive. Maybe try an adverbial opener?
Next time I will remember that thanks.
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It’s great that you’ve tried to use personification, simile and some really appropriate adjectives. Next time, vary your sentence openers. A lot of these are repetitive. Maybe try an adverbial opener?
Next time I will remember that thanks.