Could you try to add variety to your sentence openers? A lot of them start with ‘the’. Perhaps an adverbial opener would help? E.g. ‘In the distance’ or ‘As hard a they could, they icicles hung on.’
You’ve definitely used great personification here though such as ‘dancing wildly’ to describe the trees.
I like the way you describe the birds and used adjectives .
You have put your hard work into it.
Could you try to add variety to your sentence openers? A lot of them start with ‘the’. Perhaps an adverbial opener would help? E.g. ‘In the distance’ or ‘As hard a they could, they icicles hung on.’
You’ve definitely used great personification here though such as ‘dancing wildly’ to describe the trees.
Thank you for the suggestion.
I love the description of your work.why have you used such small paragraphs?Next time use big paragraphs!!!