Well done for using your senses to help describe the setting
,You have used great adverbs, but watch out for repetition. Your first paragraph uses slowly at least three times! Similarly, you’ve used freezing a lot in the next paragraph. I wonder what other words you could use to show that they are very cold?
I like the ajectives you described for the icicles.How did you come up with those ideas.I suggest you don,t put so many smiles.
Well done for using your senses to help describe the setting
,You have used great adverbs, but watch out for repetition. Your first paragraph uses slowly at least three times! Similarly, you’ve used freezing a lot in the next paragraph. I wonder what other words you could use to show that they are very cold?
I will try not use slowly too much I will use other ones