night fury Ronnie

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2 Responses to night fury Ronnie

  1. mitchell says:

    I liked the adjectives you have used like sparkling and magnificent.
    Why have you used these pictures.
    Ronnie, maybe use some more adjectives next time.

  2. sdavis says:

    I agree with Mitchell, those are greater adverbs. (Mitchell, don’t forget question marks for questions) . Also really like your personification. When the wind howls outside, I can almost hear it!
    Did you mean a pile of chains?
    Could you use conjunctions to link sentences next time?

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