I like this piece of work Adam.
You have used some great wow words and have described this story very well.
What else do you think you could do to make this story even better?
How else could you continue it?
I really like this story Adam, I think with some more ideas you can turn this into a thrilling story. I like your character’s description. Remember that the word ‘their’ is for when your talking about someone and the word ‘there’ is talking about a place. Why are the children being sent to their death? what is Adameus going to do about it?
I look forward to reading the rest of this story.
I like the way you said in ancient Greece
you’s the bad giy
grate
Wow you did amazing I am going to ask you some
questions why do you like this story?
Did you put in some wow words?
I like the presitation
Thank you william!!!
Very good describing about the village.Why did you pick Adameus as the hero ‘s name?
Because it was the only thing I could think of.
I like your descripsen beacase it describe your carcters realy good
try using subornet clause
I will , oliwier
You have Good Adverbs
Thank you.
I like this piece of work Adam.
You have used some great wow words and have described this story very well.
What else do you think you could do to make this story even better?
How else could you continue it?
Thanks.
I really like this story Adam, I think with some more ideas you can turn this into a thrilling story. I like your character’s description. Remember that the word ‘their’ is for when your talking about someone and the word ‘there’ is talking about a place. Why are the children being sent to their death? what is Adameus going to do about it?
I look forward to reading the rest of this story.